I Lost My Voice so I'm Trying to Find it Again
Sweat running down my face
Deep emerald grass offering some relief
And the trees offering more
My calves slightly aching
And an endless energy coming from my chest
My mind is floating
And so am I
Ignoring the limits of my body
Feels like I rise 10 feet effortlessly with every jump
Agility is peaking
One more round and we’ll call it
No, I meant two
Let's do another
The disk flies to me, and I miss the catch
Finally breaking the tie in the other team’s favor
We lost, but it’s the happiest moment for everyone
The highlight of their day
Free from the disappointment losing brings
True sportsmanship
Derived from friendship
I write poems mostly for myself, and this poem brings back special memories mostly for me since only I can understand every part of the environment. I tried to bring out the timeless feeling that comes when we are spending time with friends and the out-of-body experience that comes with prolonged physical exertion and somehow makes the pain disappear. I saw that I don’t use too much imagery and focus more on my train of thought, order of events, and feelings. For this poem, it worked fairly well, since what I wanted to convey was how I felt during those moments.
Things I could work on are using more specific words in my writing to make it more interesting and add some difficulty to interpret for the reader. I also want to start writing about things that more people can relate to and get something out of it. If not something broader, writing something more specific would be better for me to hone my skills to find better words to express ideas.
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